WRITING 321 

PLAN 2: Revision

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• Add in subtitles to make it more understandable for the audience.  

• Shorten/ cut out points of the story that are not as important to shorten and include more of a conclusion.

• Pace questions so viewers are able to read.

• Add conclusion to sum up her main point about family being so important to her getting through the challenges that she faced.

• Revise pictures that are in the beginning of the video.

• Find music effective for pieces of story.

• Create better transitions between questions that we asked.

• Add more background information in the beginning about Liberia and the war.